Feedback - Random notes

 Adopt a structure more akin to a Manifesto

Using the 10 points (thought process) listed as headings and expand on them

Work on tone of writing. Re-craft , do I want it to be more humorous? I can doubt myself but not to a high extent. Need more confidence in my own writing and voice. 

- Move closer to being more affirmative, proud & confident without losing the questioning and wandering quality


10 things to tell myself in the mirror - to get through this year


Don't stop question, be honest and true.


Could be a guide to my life for now..


> Judgement from thePunjabi community


- Is today a cover up day?

- When am I brave?


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